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Seven pitfalls in offers
You can easily avoid these. Your offer will definitely score better.
1. Not immediately describing client’s question
Set the most important expectation of the client in the first paragraph and use after that the full second and at times even the third paragraph.
2. Writing a lot about you
An offer is experienced as a custom made one when it deals with the client situation. Keep as a rule of thumb that your offer must at least use the word “you” twice as often as the word “we”. It will then be fine.
3. Using cliché sentences
Some offers are full of these. You will find in many offers the following closure sentence: “Trusting to have been of service to you, we remain”, This sentence is at least old-fashioned by 40 years. The worst about it is that it blocks interactivity.
Writing of 4 apology words
With these you already apologise for not keeping promises.
For instance: “soon; as soon as possible; try; hoping; would like; to do my best”. Be concrete and say: at the latest on Wednesday; within two days
5. Denial writing
Sellers frequently deny the points that they themselves find negative and achieve with this that the customer notices this and takes over the same mindset.
For instance: “Do not be frightened; I do not want to deny; you must not think that ...”
6. Generalisations in offers
A person who generalises is worried that others will not believe him and wants to strengthen his story with a generality and achieves exactly the opposite with this.
Examples of generalities are: “always; everything; everyone; nowhere; nobody; everywhere; never”
7. Long-winded writing
Long sentences
The standard is on average 15 words per sentence in commercial offers. This type of text has only 8 words per sentence. This can easily be done under “options” in your spell-check by ticking off the readability statistics.